Tips for Writers: She shrugged

shrug-gestureI frequently encounter this sentence in the work of both students and would-be contributors to my magazine: “She shrugged her shoulders.”

With student work, invariably I cross out “her shoulders” and write in the margins, “what other body parts can be shrugged?” With submissions to the magazine, you can guess what I do (usually).

The verb “to shrug” means “to raise and contract (the shoulders)” and thus adding shoulders as an object of shrug is, at best, redundant. (The expression “shrug off” is different, of course.)

 

About the author

I am the author of three novels--THE LAST BIRD OF PARADISE, OLIVER'S TRAVELS, and THE SHAMAN OF TURTLE VALLEY--and three story collections--IN AN UNCHARTED COUNTRY, HOUSE OF THE ANCIENTS AND OTHER STORIES, and WHAT THE ZHANG BOYS KNOW, winner of the Library of Virginia Literary Award for Fiction. I am also the co-founder and former editor of Prime Number Magazine and the editor of the award-winning anthology series EVERYWHERE STORIES: SHORT FICTION FROM A SMALL PLANET.

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